Version 1 & 2

VERSION 1

Prologue 

Passport ✓
Airplane ticket ✓
Foreign currency ✓
Hotel address ✓
Hotel voucher ✓
Boarding pass ✓

Looks like I have everything, I sighed in relief. A wave of excitement washed over me as I realised that I was really, truly flying off to Mauritius! I still couldn’t believe my luck – and to think that I had won this trip made it all the more amazing. Suddenly it dawned on me that maybe this was one of those wonderful dreams you never want to wake up from, but inevitably do. No, it just couldn’t be – could it? I pinched myself hard to double check and instead of feeling pain, I heard a loud “OUCH!” coming from my left hand side. I turned in horror to the man sitting next to me.

“Oh my God! Did I really just pinch you?” I asked in horror.

His scowl was quickly replaced by a chuckle when he saw the look on my face. “If you wanted to get my attention, you could have just talked to me you know.”

I laughed and introduced myself.

“Can I at least ask why you felt the need to pinch me?” he grinned.

I giggled and told him about winning a trip to Mauritius. He was friendly and easy to talk to so we chatted until I finally heard my flight being called.

“Oooh, that’s me!” I exclaimed, jumping up in a flash as he watched me in amusement.

“The plane won’t leave without you, you know?” he said grinning.

I beamed back at him. “Well, I’m not taking any chances!” I said chuckling, as I waved over my shoulder and practically ran to Gate 3 where we were boarding.


 
VERSION 2

Prologue 

“OUCH!”

I jumped in surprise, swivelling in horror towards the stranger sitting next to me.

“Oh my God! Please tell me I didn’t just pinch you!”

His scowl was quickly replaced by a chuckle when he saw the look on my face. “If you wanted to get my attention, you could have just talked to me you know.”

“I’m so sorry, not to mention totally embarrassed, but I was actually meant to be pinching myself…” I said, feeling like a fool.

“And pinching yourself is something you do for fun?” he joked.

“No! I giggled my face flushing. “I won this trip in a photo competition and I guess I’m having a hard time believing that it’s actually real,” I explained. “I mean, just imagine – me, Molly Malahan, from Perth Western Australia, flying off to Mauritius! Totally surreal – so I was pinching myself to make sure I wasn’t dreaming.”

“Well Molly Malahan from Perth Western Australia, I duly confirm that you’re not dreaming,” he said solemnly, stroking his arm, wincing.

I hid my face behind my hands and groaned in embarrassment.

“I’m only kidding, it didn’t hurt,” he laughed. “Well not much anyway…” he added teasingly.

He was friendly and easy to talk to, so we chatted until I finally heard my flight being called.

“Oooh, that’s me!” I exclaimed, jumping up in a flash as he watched me in amusement.

“The plane won’t leave without you, you know?” he said grinning.

I beamed back at him. “Well, I’m not taking any chances!” I said chuckling, as I waved over my shoulder and practically ran to Gate 3 where we were boarding.

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